A Nightjar’s Song (aka: Goatsucker)
Stir this cream-soaked moon, gently wean
sweet milk from cloud-wisped light that’s caught
in warmed white jugs. An owl shrills three hoots,
premonitions of we
two, our hearts askew and scarred
by piercing cries of a nightjar.
Reverie Prompt #26 – Indonesian Poetry Forms: Sekar madya, Wirangrong: Syllable line Length and rhyming end vowels: 8i, 8o, 10u, 6i, 7a, 8a
That produced sound from me, something I discovered, at my reading last Sunday, is what we want from our readers/listeners. I was fascinated with how much happens in this short piece and how many different moods there are.
I think the different moods resulted from my not knowing where this one was headed…. ahem. To be honest, I wrote this one line by line backward so that the vowel rhyme requirement was a priority. It made for an odd way of writing, and I wasn’t sure what was what.
Interesting, Misky. It works. The different moods do too.
Thank you, Margo. Always appreciate your feed-back.
Misk, it worked writing backwards. I love the painting I see in my mind.
Thank you! What a perfectly wonderful comment.